SSS is here: http://www.sixsunday.com so do go and take a look at what everyone's writing about.
And without further ado, here are my six sentences from my current WIP:
Piper
released an oar and caressed the Sea Eagle's flaring brown sides. "Your
timing stinks, Pop," she muttered as she gripped the oar again to dip it into
a wave.
The wrong
wave. It propelled the boat onto its crest, throwing up the stern and lowering
the bow. If she hadn't been quite so strong and hadn't braced her feet firmly
under the bench she'd have been tossed into the sea. She clenched her teeth and
braced her legs to take the jolt as the boat fell full-bottom smack into the
sea.
My stomach lurched with that last line. LOL Great six!!
ReplyDeleteOuch. :) lovely visual image there.
ReplyDeleteShe sounds like on tough cookie. Love!
ReplyDeleteI've been on a ride like that at Universal Studios. Ended up soaking wet. :P
ReplyDeleteGreat visual of the stern and bow tipping in the wave, and her feet braced for impact.
The strong sense of rhythm in the words really helps propel the action even faster. Well done. :)
ReplyDeleteBeautiful image, using several senses.
ReplyDeleteI actually clenched my teeth with her, great six!
ReplyDeleteNow I really want to know what happens next. Excellent six, Sue!
ReplyDeleteThis is brilliantly done by author. For the development of grammar you can easily correct sentence online. Great description!
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